摘要：LI Hua, as one of your students write you a letter asking you for a help to me in correcting a written application to a foreign-t

文/刘宝彩/天津

针对标题，现看用英语思维法写的英语作文例文，然后回答标题之问题。

题目：“请求外教修改兼职工作申请书”写作英语逻辑思维之英语作文。

作文正文：

I, LI Hua, as one of your students write you a letter asking you for a help to me in correcting a written application to a foreign-trade company for my getting a part-time job done during summer holiday this year.

Enabling me to achieve success in looking for the job to put English into practice, you are expected to make kindly valuable comments on above application together with my resume.

They are sent to you by letter, partly seen as being possibly inappropriate to the practical use into its terms and / or expressions, form or format of the application, if any.

These comments of yours could inspire the company to gain a highly favourable impression of me, I hope.

看后这篇英语思维作文，再看用英文思维写英语作文而不是直接翻译之原因，主要有以下四点：

一、符合英语表达习惯

英语和汉语在语法、句式结构、词汇用法等方面存在诸多差异。如英语中存在大量的固定搭配、习惯用语和特殊的语法规则，直接翻译可能导致表达生硬、不符合英语的习惯用法。例如，“好好学习，天天向上”直译为“Good good Study, day day up”就不符合英语表达，正确的是“Study hard and make progress every day”。

二、避免中式英语

中式英语是指在英语表达中受汉语思维和表达方式的影响，产生不符合英语语言习惯的错误表达。如果写作文时先在脑海中用中文构思然后翻译，很容易出现中式英语。比如，“我非常喜欢它”，可能会错误地写成“I very like it”，而正确的是“I like it very much”。

三、提高语言流畅性

用英文思维写作，能够让作者直接按照英语的逻辑和方式组织思路，使文章的结构更加清晰，语言更加流畅自然。例如在论述观点时，英语习惯先提出论点，再进行举例论证，而中文有时会先进行铺垫再提出观点。

四、更好地传达思想

英文思维有助于更准确地传达作者的思想和情感。英语中有丰富的词汇和表达方式，能够细腻地表达各种概念和情感。直接用英文思考和写作，可以让作者更灵活地运用这些资源，使文章更具表现力。比如描述一个人“angry”（生气），还可以用“furious”“irate”等更生动的词汇来表达不同程度的愤怒。

下面再举例两篇英语思维法写的英语作文

第一篇题目：吉祥数字是否吉祥

Some people believe in such “numbers”，as three, five, eight and six，that will bring luck to them. They would pay much money for purchase of phones or cars, whose code numbers or plate ones are inclusive of above numbers helping them find “real” enjoyment just in becoming wealthy day by day. These “lucky numbers” have nothing to do with the success and luck.

They are both to achieve by making great efforts on carrying out one’s tasks and give to someone who will work hard at doing some finishing with an excellent quality from time to time. This ensures that success results from hard work, to prove without failure.

Leading to this, Laziness seems senseless about reliance too much on these numbers. Only in these, could someone get almost lazier. They are expected to win real achievement at work through great efforts to make intellectually or physically.

第二篇英语作文：题目介绍天津

Tianjin is one of big and beautiful cities in the east of Beijing, the capital of China. It remains attractive to visitors from all parts of China who look forward to having its information known to them.

This makes me proud of achievement in Tianjin city that becomes famous for Drum Tower, Tianjin Eye and much delicious food, together with for some interesting - sightseeing places and ancient buildings. By visiting them, tourists can have a good time on holiday, getting much more familiar with locally social development.

It enables the population to grow for a little more than 15 million. Some people are kept either at work to do or in life to live, in newly high- store buildings, that makes them happy with the best time day by day.

Compared with this, to enjoy taking a trip alongside Haihe river by cruise, visitors have a great time during their visit to 600 -year- old Tianjin city where they would buy themselves some traditionally delicious food from shops opened in the High Street. In it, tourists would find it busy for some people go here and there by vehicle from time to time.

总结：

语法不是主要的，你是中级英语也好，还是高级英语也好，都没关系。你如果已经成了somebody（英语不错的人）了，没有人在乎你的语法和英语水平，关键是那个英语表达的“语流”流利，主要是你能不能用英文思维，如果你能think points in English, 那你绝对没有问题。真正的写作好或口语好就是你能参加一个讨论会，你能把你的思想能够成串地用很好的英语且很达意的表达出来，这是高级的写作和口语表达。而这种表达的关键是你能用英文思考，你不能用翻译。所以你不能先想我要说一个什么话题，然后当场的翻这个，那你就没过关。因此过关的英语应该是能用英文思考表达出真实思想。同样：“得高分！英语作文为什么要用英文思维法写作，而不要用直接翻译法写作”之道理是相同的。

编辑语：

《得高分 三例英语作文为啥要用英文思维法写作 而不用直接翻译法写？》向读者表明，解锁英语作文高分密码：英文思维法的魅力。

具体地说，在英语学习中，作文常常是不少同学的“拦路虎”。为什么花费大量时间背单词、学语法，写出来的作文却总与高分失之交臂？本文作者老师带来了答案：关键在于摒弃直接翻译法，转而运用英文思维法写作！

文章通过“请求外教修改兼职工作申请书”“吉祥数字是否吉祥”“介绍天津”三篇精彩三篇例文，直观展现英文思维法写作的成果。不同于直接翻译的生硬拼凑，英文思维法产出的作文逻辑清晰、表达流畅，贴合英语母语者的语言习惯。

文中详细阐述了英文思维法写作的四大核心优势：符合英语表达习惯，告别“Chinglish”；避免中式英语的尴尬错误；让文章结构与语言更自然流畅；更精准细腻地传达思想情感。这不仅是提高英语作文分数的“捷径”，更是迈向高级英语表达的必经之路。

语法、词汇量固然重要，但真正的英语高手，靠的是用英文思维组织语言，将所思所想自然、准确地转化为地道的英语。如果你也渴望在英语作文中脱颖而出，在英语交流中自信表达，不妨跟随文章的指引，踏上英文思维写作的探索之旅，相信你会收获意想不到的进步！

来源：原创英语写作范文