摘要：在英语写作中，许多同学习惯频繁使用简单句，并且仅用逗号连接而缺少连词，这种做法在现代英语语法中是绝对错误的。尤其当两个分句中出现相同的人或物时，完全可以将其合并为定语从句。这样不仅能使句子结构更紧凑、逻辑关联更清晰，也会提升表达的档次。在中考和高考中，运用这类
在英语写作中，许多同学习惯频繁使用简单句，并且仅用逗号连接而缺少连词，这种做法在现代英语语法中是绝对错误的。尤其当两个分句中出现相同的人或物时，完全可以将其合并为定语从句。这样不仅能使句子结构更紧凑、逻辑关联更清晰，也会提升表达的档次。在中考和高考中，运用这类高级句型还能为作文加分。今天我看见有位同学的英文就有这类典型的错误，我根据语境给出了修改建议。看看原文和DeepSeek怎么说吧。
一，发现问题
二，分析问题并修改
仅仅用逗号隔开，没有连词，因此是错误表述。后面的it指的就是mistake，因此完全可以合并成定语从句，为了锁定唯一的关系代词，我用了非限制性定语从句。
1.I have made a mistake, which remains and guides me on my path of growth.[微风][烟花]
a summer day和去公园晒太阳是同一天，中间只有逗号，没有连词，也是错误的，可以合并成定语从句,这里用关系副词when，因为做状语。用过去时态。主句用it was，用it happened更好。
2.It happened on a summer day when I had nothing to do at home, so I wanted to sunbath in the park.[微风][烟花]
看见某某做某事，不用介词in。little brother不地道，用boy更好。
3.I saw a little boy playing the sandbag…….[微风][烟花]
下面两句，是因果关系，用so连接比较好。
4.I would like to find a playmate, so I went over and asked him to play together. He nodded.[微风][烟花]
我最后的修改版本如下
I have made a mistake which remains and guides me on the path of my growth. It happened on a summer day when I had nothing to do, so I wanted to sunbath in the park. Suddenly I saw a little boy playing sandbag. I would like to find a plsymate, so I went over and asked him to play together. He nodded.
三，总结
下面是DeepSeek对我的总结和评价。
思考题[微风][烟花]用单词填空。
1.The young lady has three children, all of __are students in the same grade.
2.I have a good friend, __name is Tom.
3.Do remember the most beautiful place ___we visited last week?
4.I never forget the busy day, __we spent working together.
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