摘要：本修改由四个部分构成：一、同学写作英语作文原文；二、作文修改后的成文；三、作文修改过程（修改中添加颜色及下划线可能看不到了，如需帮助请联系作者）；四、读后续写阅读材料。

还60余天英语作文越想快学习写作越抄模板越套范文 结果怎么样了呢

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快速进步 读后续写英语作文：学生写作原文是怎么修改的及成优秀文？

本修改由四个部分构成：一、同学写作英语作文原文；二、作文修改后的成文；三、作文修改过程（修改中添加颜色及下划线可能看不到了，如需帮助请联系作者）；四、读后续写阅读材料。

一、同学写作大作文原文

Mrs. Moore bought a ready-made one from an Internet store and had some workers fixed it up in her garden.

When we thought that we could get our tree house back,we were surprised to find that Taffy showed little Interest toward the new one and still occupied ours. We tried to put soft blanket and cat food in it, but there was no use. Upset, Jennifer and I had to stay at home and had no where to talk about our girlish matters casually. Seeing there was no way to solve the problem. Dad persuade us to give up the house. Soon, Mrs Moore paid a visit with tasty biscuits and promised to deal with the situation.

建议：关于Mrs. Moore为她的猫买待组装的房子而猫又不喜欢后，多写出现的问题前因后果及始终解决不了的问题，于是为写下文作好了铺垫。

Mrs. Moore racked her brains(绞尽脑汁)and worked out a plan to exchange our tree houses.

Although we liked our own delicate tree house, we still agreed with the idea. Mrs. Moore employed some workers to exchange the house. Then, to our astonishment. Mrs Moore pooled her paining tools to paint on the ready-made house. Her drawing was so skillful that only after on afternoon it was done! It was still a yellow tree house with red root, but it was added with cherry flowers which was blooming as well as a variety of small cute animals on it. No sooner did we catch sight of it, we were fascinated by it. Mrs. Moore was really a nice neighbor

总体看，这段写得可以但细微待修改。

二、大作文修改后的成文

Mrs. Moore bought a ready-made one from an Internet store and had some workers fixed it up in her garden.

To my surprise, I find that Taffy in getting him back to our tree house, showed little interest toward the newly ready-made one and still occupied ours, in my view. As this reminds us, it is necessary for us to put soft blanket and cat food in new one, but there was no use. Remaining upset about Taffy’s no attention to this, Jennifer and I had to stay at home where to ask anyone for help to us in talking about our Taffy’s matters casually. Without seeing there was no way to solve the problem，或Coming to find it impossible to work out solution to the problem. Dad has been forced by this to persuade us to give up the house. Unexpectedly. Soon one day, Mrs Moore paid a visit to us with tasty biscuits in her hand, promising to us to deal with the problem.

以上基本是按照原文内容修改的。

以下修改成文：添加逻辑思维词语句，内容有的添加一点，所以英语句子作调整或增加。

Mrs. Moore racked her brains(绞尽脑汁)and worked out a plan to exchange our tree houses.

Although we liked our own delicate tree house, we still agreed with the idea that the ready-made house varies with the beauties and colour according to Mrs. Moore who asked some workers to exchange our house. After that, to our astonishment Mrs Moore has, by pooling paints together with brushes out of her tools box, painted on the ready-made house so skillfully and beautifully that Taffy cat enjoys moving to his new house pleasantly.

This results from the fact that, only after spending wholly on afternoon, did Mrs. Moore succeed in finishing producing her great works. What a comfortable and delightful house it is that Taffy has! It was still a yellow tree house with red root. As is shown by her paintings on its wall, cherry blossom or sukura is coming out as well as a variety of small vividly-living animals such as fishes are swimming back and forth in “water”. No sooner did we catch sight of the ready-made house, which was fascinating to all. Accordingly, Mrs. Moore was said to be a really nice neighbor, whose dream has come true for working out a plan to exchange our tree house.

最后一句，首尾呼应。

三、作文修改过程（修改中添加颜色及下划线可能看不到了，如需帮助请联系作者）

Mrs. Moore bought a ready-made one from an Internet store and had some workers fixed it up in her garden.

When we thought that（作为插入语处理较好：in my view）we could get our tree house back（作为次要形式处理：getting...back）,we were surprised （使用“暗藏”逻辑较好：to my surprise,且放置位置灵活，可前可中可后）to find that Taffy showed little interest toward the new one and still occupied ours（逻辑上讲是真正的“提示句”，也就是语法上的主句）。

We tried to put soft blanket and cat food in it（句首加上“暗藏”逻辑As this reminds us,正好上句与本句，有自然“过渡”的逻辑“沟子”，保证句句之间不“断层”，如同火车头和其后车厢以及每节车厢之间有链接的沟子，才能运行起来,且把“We tried...”换成稍有“力度”一点意思“有必要...”等的表达，整体改进为：

As this reminds us, it is necessary for us to put soft blanket and cat food in tree house, but there was no use. Upset（Remaining upset about Taffy’s no attention to this）, Jennifer and I had to stay at home （and had no places）where（to ask anyone for help to us）to talk（in talking）about （our girlish） Taffy’s matters casually. Seeing there was no way to solve the problem（Without seeing there was no way to solve the problem，或Coming to find it impossible to work out solution to the problem,）. Dad has been forced by this to persuade us to give up the house. （Unexpectedly） Soon （one day）, Mrs Moore paid a visit （to us） with tasty biscuits（in her hand） and promised （, promising to us）to deal with the situation（problem）.

Mrs. Moore racked her brains(绞尽脑汁)and worked out a plan to exchange our tree houses.

Although we liked our own delicate tree house, we still agreed with the idea. that the the ready-made house varies with the beauties and colour according to Mrs. Moore who employed asked some workers to exchange our house. Then（After that）, to our astonishment. Mrs Moore was, by pooled（pooling）her paiting →（painting）paints together with brushes out of her tools, to pait（paint）on the ready-made house. Her drawing was （取消）so skillfully and beautifully that Taffy cat enjoys moving to his new house pleasantly.

This results from the fact that only（Only）after spending wholly on afternoon,did Mrs. Moore succeed in finishing producing her great works.it was done What a comfortable and delightful house it is that Taffy has ! It was still a yellow tree house with red root,. but it was added with

As is shown by her paintings on its wall, cherry flowers blossom or sukura which was blooming are coming out as well as（to）a variety of small cute vividly-living animals such as fishes on it are swimming back and forth in “water”. No sooner did we catch sight of it the ready-made house, we which were was fascinated fascinating by it to all. Accordingly, Mrs. Moore was said to be really a a really nice neighbor, whose dream has come true for working out a plan to exchange our tree house.

四、读后续写阅读材料

读后续写材料原文。

考生续写英语作文就此内容——"Mrs. Moore在网上购买了一个现成的房子并让工人在花园里进行了维修。令我惊讶的是，当我们想把树屋还给宠物猫Taffy住时，他对新房子的兴趣不大，仍然占据着原来的树屋。为了解决这个问题，我们尝试了放软毯和猫食，但没有用。为了解决这个问题，我们不得不放弃房子"总结：

快速进步，读后续写英语作文：学生写作原文是怎么修改的及其成为优秀英语作文的。这源于学生——修改前后的差别在于：修改之前原文写作没有注意到英语逻辑思维词、语、句的使用以及“暗藏”逻辑的使用，因为学生在学校从来没有听说过逻辑思维还可以应用于英语写作；修改之后亲眼看到逻辑思维原理和操作在英语作文应用的体现。还60余天所以英语作文越想快学习写作，学生越抄模板越套范文，但结果怎么样了呢？从上述内容看出：不甚理想。有兴趣得高分的考生及想了解应用逻辑思维写英语作文学习者，请留言我助你一臂之力。

编辑语：

《还60余天英语作文越想快学习写作越抄模板越套范文 结果怎么样了呢》一文：文章讲述了Mrs. Moore为宠物猫Taffy购买了一个待组装的树屋后，Taffy对此并不感兴趣，仍占据着原来的树屋。Mrs. Moore运用自己的智慧和创造力，将树屋进行了改造并成功吸引了Taffy。

1. 逻辑连贯：文章按照事情发展的先后顺序，先讲述了Mrs. Moore购买和组装树屋的过程，然后描述了Taffy对新树屋的不感兴趣，最后讲述了Mrs. Moore如何通过改造树屋解决问题。

2. 具体描述：文章对Mrs. Moore改造树屋的过程进行了详细描述，包括她如何运用自己的绘画技巧，将新树屋装饰成一个美丽且舒适的住所。

3. 情感描写：文章对Mrs. Moore的友善和智慧进行了描写，她不仅帮助解决了问题，还展现了她的创造力和对宠物的关爱。

来源：原创英语写作范文