摘要：标题让我想到：学生用模板写英语作文,为啥大考判卷老师给降低档次扣分数?AI模板把多种网上人们归纳的模板再归纳“高级”模板。本质上难以把个人思想“套进”模板中而准确地表达出思想内容。但是只要有思想内容，句、段、高档词汇自然就会产生，所以无思想，那高档的词汇是出不

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标题让我想到：学生用模板写英语作文,为啥大考判卷老师给降低档次扣分数?AI模板把多种网上人们归纳的模板再归纳“高级”模板。本质上难以把个人思想“套进”模板中而准确地表达出思想内容。但是只要有思想内容，句、段、高档词汇自然就会产生，所以无思想，那高档的词汇是出不来的，基于丰富的思想写英语作文，高考英语作文得24分就水到渠成了（满分25）。所以皮之不存，毛之焉附（皮为思想；毛为高档词汇）。由此希望：大考英语作文怎么从19分爬升得到24分高分数，定对考生有启示！

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㈠My dream job is a police ①which is consider as a wonderful occupation. ②It is ten years old that I decided to be a policeman. ③That my father is a police makes a difference in my job choice. ㈡Not only do I think does this job is deeply needed by persons but I can help a great number of humans. ㈢As for police, patience and bravery are the first standards ④for people who are dying to join the lines.

⑤And by coincidence, I think ㈣I have both the qualities so that ⑥I am competent to become a perfect policeman. What’s more, ㈤I determine to study hard in order to make my dream job admired by others come true one day.

一、原英语作文的有效内容有六点：㈠ My dream job is a police ㈡ does this job is deeply needed by persons but I can help a great number of humans ㈢ As for police, patience and bravery are the first standards ㈣ have both the qualities ㈤determine to study hard ㈥make my dream job…come true one day

其中：㈡的is 应改为as ；㈣的qualities是什么？没有叙述清楚

二、原英语作文的无效内容有六点：

①which is consider as a wonderful occupation. ②It is ten years old that I decided to be a policeman. ③That my father is a police makes a difference in my job choice. ④for people who are dying to join the lines. ⑤And by coincidence, I think…⑥I am competent to become a perfect policeman. What’s more,

三、要叙述清楚当警察理由，及当警察的结果，即：为什么想当警察，当警察的结果是什么。让读者知道：警察把人民的利益当做最重要的利益放在第一位的观点的证据包括理论和实践证据……最后贴近主题说出：我要当警察、为此本文作者写作英语作文如下：

The police is at people’s service day and night, finding the solution to social problem and safeguarding their interests to keep sociability in order. All police, whose natural sense of justice is to have always with people, anytime and anywhere, makes them safe in life and at work mentally and materially or physically, by teaching someone to know right from wrong.

The policemen and policewomen are often working potentially at risk, with bravery and hard work, enabling people to avoid suffering material loss. They are able to develop intellectually, analytically and physically, in the interest of people together with of Chinese nation, getting admired and respected by all people, in my view.

The police are always giving people protection for their safety hour by hour and day by day. This brings the police not to unite with their families in holidays seasons but to carry out the people-serving responsibilities and obligations, on duty, in all their glory.

To their safety, happiness, enjoyment, police consider people’s interests as being important to the top, helping them with physical and mental health that needs to mAIntain day and night.

The police-done job, the great one, keeps sociability stable in people’s lives and at work, by providing them with services, great and small, to their glory.

My dream is expected to come true about being one of the policemen whom I would follow by working hard at doing courses, at present, in school.

总结：

内容思想观点最最重要，其次才有英语句式，而不是相反。原英语作文评为接近二类文。这样完全理解了：高考生用模板写英语，为啥判卷老师给降档扣分了。所以不难理解——英语作文“能抄能套”是错的吗？为啥别让考生陷入模板“AI陷阱”？——之缘由了。

编辑语：

《英语作文“能抄能套”是错的吗 为啥别让考生陷入模板“AI陷阱”？》一文，这篇文章主要分析了学生使用模板写作英语作文可能遇到的问题，并强调了内容思想的重要性。

1. 模板的局限性：模板往往无法准确表达个人思想，导致作文缺乏深度和独特性。

2. 内容思想的重要性：优质的内容和独特的思想是英语作文成功的关键，只有基于丰富的思想，才能写出高分作文。

3. 对考生的启示：强调不要过度依赖模板，而是要注重培养自己的思考能力和表达能力，提高英语写作水平。

来源：原创英语写作范文