摘要:A touching essay by Zhang Xiaoran, a ninth-grade student at Dinglan Experimental Middle School in Hangzhou, Zhejiang province, has
“火车一路向北,窗外景色从南方的温婉渐变为北方的辽阔。”
“铁轨锈成了记忆里的虚线,故乡洇成了底片上的残影。”
“车厢里亲切熟悉的方言,和着车轮与铁轨摩擦声,混响成一首怀旧的歌谣。”
近日,在浙江杭州丁兰实验中学读初三的学生张潇冉,以一篇名为《旧轨还乡》的作文火爆全网。在她沉静的朗读中,真挚的文字静静流淌,让无数网友沉醉其中。
A touching essay by Zhang Xiaoran, a ninth-grade student at Dinglan Experimental Middle School in Hangzhou, Zhejiang province, has taken the internet by storm. Her serene narration and sincere prose, brimming with nostalgia, have moved countless netizens to tears.
有网友评价,作文里“句句不提乡愁,句句皆是乡愁”,还有人说:“听完这篇寒假作文想家了!”“心底埋藏的故乡瞬间被唤醒”……
Readers praised the essay for "never mentioning homesickness yet embodying it in every line." Comments flooded in: "This winter break assignment made me miss home!" and "It instantly reawakened the hometown buried deep in my heart."
这篇作文是如何构思出来的?背后有着怎样的故事?
感人作文
源自真实归乡经历
将张潇冉朗读作文的视频发到网上的,是她的语文老师王杨军。去年寒假,他给同学们布置了作文作业,开学后开始陆续批改。看到张潇冉这篇作文的时候,他顿时眼前一亮。
Zhang's Chinese teacher, Wang Yangjun, shared her reading of the essay online. Last winter break, he had assigned his students to write an essay, and upon grading them, Zhang's work immediately stood out.
乘务员推着小车,叫卖着各种商品。年轻人大多置之不理,他们便将目标转向了年迈的老人。但无论推销员的言辞多么天花乱坠、充满诱惑,那位爷爷始终不为所动。然而,当推销员随口一句“孩子爱吃”,他就毫不犹豫地掏了钱,一笔莫名其妙的生意就这样心甘情愿地成交了。
——《旧轨还乡》
王杨军说,这篇作文的动人之处除了文笔,还在于张潇冉对生活的细致观察。“爷爷为孙子蜷缩在卧铺尾部,孙子掀开窗帘看外面,尤其是爷爷因为一句‘孩子爱吃’就买下商品的细节,都很打动人。”王杨军说,“我一点都不怀疑它的真实性,没有观察真实生活是写不出来这些文字的。”
而现实中的张潇冉不像视频中朗读作文时那般沉静,她的脸上洋溢着十几岁少年的活泼。
提起写作的过程,张潇冉说,其实《旧轨还乡》并没有什么特别的构思,只是如实记述了寒假回乡途中在火车上的见闻,这勾起了她儿时的记忆。尤其是一对爷孙的互动让她很受触动,于是就记录了下来,“顺便交个寒假作业”。
Wang highlighted that what moved him most was Zhang's keen observation of life.
In person, Zhang is far from the composed narrator in the video—her face radiates the exuberance of a typical teenager.
“我家的亲戚都在内蒙古,我爸骑马超级帅!”
张潇冉出生在杭州,只有逢年过节才回老家内蒙古看望亲人。因此,虽然年龄不大,她却对乡愁有着深切的体会。提笔时,这份乡愁就流淌到了文字里。可能正是这种“真实”,让她的文字更有感染力,也打动了她的语文老师王杨军。
作文走红网络
她更加认识到语文的魅力
王杨军决定让张潇冉在课上做分享,请全班聆听这份真情,他说这不仅是文笔的熏陶,也是心灵的浸润。“同学们安安静静地聆听着、感受着,他们对于父母长辈的理解与感恩也在逐渐加深。”他将视频发布到网络后,更是打动了万千网友。
Wang had Zhang share her essay in class, hoping its sincerity would move her peers. "The students listened quietly, absorbing not just the writing but also the emotions—deepening their gratitude for family," he said. When he posted the video online, the response was overwhelming.
有人惊叹于张潇冉强大的文字叙事能力:“记忆变成文字展现在眼前,一幕幕如亲见。”有人感叹:“文字的力量震耳欲聋。”还有人勾起了儿时的记忆:“我的爷爷去世八年了,在我小时候,他每次赶集都会给我买泡泡糖……”
而对于作者张潇冉来说,《旧轨还乡》的走红完全出乎自己意料。她平时喜欢写作,最喜欢的作家是史铁生,这次经历也让张潇冉更加深刻地感受到,“语文真的是一个可以让自己抒发真实情绪的工具”。
For Zhang, the essay's fame was unexpected. An avid writer who admires author Shi Tiesheng, she now sees Chinese as more than a subject, "It's a tool to express real emotions."
来源:中国日报双语新闻一点号